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Reviews on A Different View by dimebg
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Review by Bella*Luna |
2006-10-25
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I've seen this done before in several different ways with several different characters...but never with Mamoru at this point. It is intriguing, thinking about what he could have been going through when he discovered the Usagi and he were destined to be together...when memories that had been covered up, erased, and forgotten came flooding back into his mind and he had no time to think, only to react. You did a good job explaining what might have happened, where he might have gone, what he might have been thinking. Leaving the ending open was a good idea too. So many people ruin a good story with an ending that doesn't fit for everyone who reads it that sometimes an open ending is all a story really needs to be truely great.
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Review by ruminant |
2006-02-12
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This was a good idea for a character study. I think that what you've shown here is pretty much what would be going through Mamoru's head right after he realizes who is truly is and what his destiny is.
I don't buy into the whole "Mamoru and Usagi automatically fall in love just because of destiny" excuse either. However, in this piece Mamoru says that he and Usagi only ever exchanged insults. However, you later mention them kissing on Ann and Alan's rooftop, so this means the piece takes place after the Doom Tree Arc. During this time, Usagi was trying to win Mamoru over. What about the play? What about the babysitting gig? Usagi was much nicer to him after she realized he was Tuxedo Mask (even though he had no memory of it). So, I believe that Usagi would have grown on Mamoru during this time. He wouldn't be so annoyed with her and may even have grown fond of her.
Also, Mamoru says he didn't go to the arcade to see his friend "Andrew". Since you've used Japanese names for Mamoru and Usagi, it's a good idea to stick with Japanese names for everyone else too. It wasn't a big deal in this particular fic, but in longer fics it gets really confusing.
I really liked that you had Mamoru tell the bartender to "go away". It would be too easy for him to pour his heart out to a wise older man and have him fix all his problems. It's too cliche', so bravo to you on not going that route.
Overall, I think you got the characterization down pretty well. I look forward to seeing some more work from you.
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