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Review by Loki |
2007-09-13
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I agree, the images are graphic, but you get the sense that it is a fight to survive, but as a reader you wonder, how was it the protagonist was driven to this violent act, was she a victim of domestic violence, or was it a crime random and based on rivalry of some sort, but it was powerful. I noticed youyou wrote 'breathe' when you meant breath.
the only other advice is you had some commas missing, but all in all for a short vignette it was dramatic, powerful and cilling -- good job ~ Loki
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