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Review by ShadowBlade 2013-07-08

I remember this story was the one that had me checking my lists every day for an update. If it was ever finished I'm sure it would make the top 100. I know I'm about 2 years late but please finish this story.
Review by MaccasWell 2010-02-10

What an amazing story.
Please don't leave it here when everything has gone to hell (Literally).
What happens to the already awakened Sailor scouts?
What happened to Ami when she was tackled?
Please continue.
Review by Nephthys Moon 2009-07-06

Jason, you certainly know how to give a girl a heart attack. That bit about Ryo's blade - VERY interesting...Makes me wonder if it's just the one attack or if he can do multiple ones as well. *curious*

All in all, an excellent chapter, dear. I quite look forward to reading the next.
Review by Chmia 2009-03-29

I'm surprised I never read this great story sooner. Please, keep up the good work.
Review by Nephthys Moon 2008-09-22

I've been doing yet another re-read of this story in the past few days, and I'm even more certain now that my original gut instinct from so long ago was correct. I know you really want to focus on your other stories for the time being, but I hope you won't make me wait too terribly long for another update to this. It really is one of my absolute favorite stories in this fandom and knowing it's being written fills me with a little feeling of glee for weeks. *hugs*
Review by ShadowBlade 2007-12-29

Great style and plot. I have read it all the way through up to ch. 19 and you have the audacity to leave it there? It's just cruel
Review by Nephthys Moon 2007-07-29

It was well worth the wait! I fully enjoyed chapter 18 and I'm further impressed by your ability to weave such a complicated story.
Review by Nephthys Moon 2007-07-16

I just finished the prologue, and thought I'd drop you a short note (if one of my reviews could ever be considered short, that is) to tell you my thoughts thus far. I'll probably do this on a per chapter basis, so I hope you don't mind - it keeps my opinion fresh as each chapter goes on.

The world you've woven is extremely complex, detailed and brilliant. I find myself wondering what will happen, and it took all my self-control (which, admittedly, is somewhat limited), not to read on to the first chapter but to stop and review first, while it was still fresh in my mind.

I think focusing on Mako-chan's family as opposed to Usagi's is actually quite clever and fresh. The hints that the bombings of Hiroshima and Nagasaki are what opened the gate between the two dimensions is so incredibly powerful and heartwrenching. I am truly fascinated.

I like that you've endowed Mako-chan with a brother, but I'm a little afraid of Ryo's fate. Will you stick with canon and have her awaken to be an only child, or will Ami's Ryo of the anime be Mako-chan's brother in your story? I am truly intrigued, not least by the appearance I waited for anxiously throughout your prologue: Chiba Mamoru. Fantastic to have him in charge, though he's not technically qualified.

You've woven something that is impossible for me to resist and now that I've finished rambling, I shall do what I've wanted to do and click 'Next'.
Review by Starsea 2006-07-24

I've read the Prologue up to Chapter Three. You have really done a great job in building up this alternative universe, especially in the prologue and the first chapter.

The prologue reminded me a lot of the beginning of "Salem's Lot" by Stephen King (in a good way!), as you gradually created the bridge between the world we know and the world created by the victory of the Dark Kingdom through using diary entries, giving us personal viewpoints of what is happening. It was sad, then it was chilling, especially as all those people began to disappear, then Umi's account of what happened to her family. The prologue really brings home the fact that the Dark Kingdom is dangerous; that it can take over the world if nobody is there to stop it, which is what happens.

You are also very clear about how Earth is ruined through the Dark Kingdom's domination (dead bodies in the fountains and ponds? that's a haunting image) and the miseries faced by the humans who are not protected by sacred ground. I like how you're developing the senshi, each different yet recognisably themselves: Ami, so sweet yet unable to speak; Rei, warmer yet still driven; Minako, who seems the least different of all. I can only wonder what Makoto's going to be like when she wakes up.

You've created a very dangerous, yet interesting world and I look forward to reading more. :)
Review by Kihin Ranno 2006-06-26

I know I've read up to chapter six or something on ASMR, and the only reason why I stopped was because Christmas vacation was over and I ran out of time. ^^; Now it is summer and I can continue, and I will do so.

Firstly, love this story. The idea alone is superb, and I am very grateful that you have the talent to execute it well. This is another one of those stories that has me kicking myself that I didn't think of it first.

I know what particularly impressed me about the story was the prologue. The style of how it was written was absolutely wonderful, and I love hearing about things from original character's perspectives. I thought the journal excerpts were marvelous, and while they all had a similar tone, they did have a subtly differing style, which was fitting considering that different people were writing them at different times. When I think back on this story, the prologue is really what sticks out in my mind before anything else.

I also rather enjoy the little world within the chaos at the shrine. The idea of everyone having a job and working is very believeable and realistic in comparison to the hell that's going on around them. But even with that peace, they're always aware of the danger on the other side of the barrier, and it creates an interesting tension that pervades the story.

Altogether, I'd say this ranks up there on my list of favorites in the originality category. I'll definitely be going back and finishing it within the next few weeks.
Review by Heavenly Pearl 2006-06-21

I only intended to read the required first three chapters of this story for the review exchange, but I have a feeling I'm going to want to continue now, especially with that cliffhanger at the end of the third chapter. ^_^ The premise behind this story is interesting, not to mention very unique. I don't believe I've never come across a fic in which the Dark Kingdom has already taken over before the senshi could be awakened, and you do a good job of painting what the world has become under the DK's control, as well as taking account the changes in the senshi themselves after having to live in that kind of world. Having Ami become a mute and putting Makoto in a coma was particularly inspired, I thought. Also, while the original character Kino Ryoku has several traits that might have made him a Gary Stu -- he's a sibling of a canon character, all the girls have crushes on him, and he is one of the best Blades despite being only fifteen years old -- he doesn't come off as annoying in any way.

My one major criticism is that sometimes you temporarily change over to present tense when the story is written in past tense. It was most noticeable in the first chapter, but there were a couple of spots in the later chapters where it happened as well, so be on the look-out for that in future chapters.
Review by December 2006-06-09

Wow! The alternate reality that you have created in this story is amazing. I had just planned on reading a few chapters, but I got sucked in and had to read all that you posted.

You do a very good job at balancing a lot in this story, e.g. history, the realities of warfare, the tendencies of humanity, the powers of the SM universe. For me, the most masterful chapter was actually the prologue! What an ingenious idea, to have the Dark Kingdom strike when they did. It both gave a great explanation for how they were able to reach Earth earlier than in the original series with the added benefit of catching humanity while it was preoccupied. I'm not quite sure how the journals managed to survive the battles and invasions, but it was a great way to set the story without confusing flashbacks everywhere.

Again, great story and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.


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