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Review by Dejana Talis |
2007-09-23
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Very nice, both sweet and wistful. I like the contrast between the fantasy world as a reality and the grown-up world as a strange place that needed to be unlocked, and the idea that he drove her away by trying to keep her. Very strong ending, too.
By contrast, the beginning is a bit weak and could use a little more development to draw readers into the story. I fully enjoyed the concept and the thoughtful ending, but some readers might not get that far without more of a beginning to catch their attention.
A very nice first fic, though. :)
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