Review by Bella*Luna |
2006-12-04
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Very good, very good. A take that I haven't seen yet on the story...not that I have looked though.
I could see some of the cells as I read your story from the manga, your descriptions are good, they are useful in creating the image in the reader's head.
A few typos, you should watch your tense when writing, in the scene whe Dark Mars meets Sailor Moon (when she tried to wake Rei up) you switch from past to present. Everyone does it, don't be discouraged! ^.^ more) |
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