General Library: Fractured Loyalties by Contrail

Rating:PG13 Created:2006-12-02
Genre:General Updated:2006-12-07
Style:General Status:Incomplete
Setting:Alternate Universe

Chapter 1 - A Darker Turn (PHP)
Chapter 2 - Unexpected Allies (HTML)


Two of the Shitennou evaded Beryl's grasp, and two of the Senshi were corrupted by her. Now the free Shitennou and their prince and the uncorrupted Senshi must struggle to defeat the Dark Kingdom, seperately or together.

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Review by SailorCancerStar 2008-05-22

I don't know if you are going to continue this, but I've enjoyed the setup. This is a nice new take on the original storyline.
Review by Bella*Luna 2006-12-04

Very good, very good. A take that I haven't seen yet on the story...not that I have looked though.

I could see some of the cells as I read your story from the manga, your descriptions are good, they are useful in creating the image in the reader's head.

A few typos, you should watch your tense when writing, in the scene whe Dark Mars meets Sailor Moon (when she tried to wake Rei up) you switch from past to present. Everyone does it, don't be discouraged! ^.^

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