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Review by Loki |
2006-08-21
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I was impressed by your alternate scenario for Michiru
I was amazed by the complexity of this powerful piece of writing. Some flaws, typos, spelling and some grammar and expression to be proofed and edited. But over-all, the power of this ficlet is outstanding. Well done!
I love your use of language, the world building skills and use of imagery, you used so well to punctuate the moment, to deliver pathos and the inner termoil michiru had gone through. but even in this gloomy realm, there was hope and though obscured by the clouds of darkness, something of this light came through -- albeit a little dappled by the mirror of deception. *hands you a violet bloom and a crystal pen and bows* L.
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