I like where the story is going, but there are some minor spelling and formatting mistakes you would probably catch yourself if you did a second read-through. Also, isn't Rei supposed to be at a different school than the other girls? If you changed that, it is fine, but maybe you should mention it in the author's notes or something. I liked the notes the girls were passing each other in class. Cute. ^^
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