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Review by Loki 2006-08-21

Wow, this is a fascinating story.

I noticed a lot of structural flaws, grammar, a lot of repetition of phrases and terms _babe_ could alternate with infant, child, etc, and some phrases -- but the narrative itself has a powerful sustained energy that could be developed much further. It is the kind of story that generates ideas and fresh -- plot bunnies -- it is haunting, immense in scale and its boundless isolation is post-modern in style.

I love the influences you have drawn upon throughout and hope you will get an editor to help you proof and polish it. It could be easily expanded -- great work! *hands you a crystal sphere and bows* L.
Review by Starsea 2006-07-08

This was such a sad story, and cold, too. There was a lot of emotion, but it felt very impersonal, an echo of the empty surroundings and the dead system. I liked the backstory on the Tau system and Mistress 9. Hotaru creeped me out, but I suppose she wouldn't exactly grow up normal in a time bubble, would she? This is a bit of an oddity, interesting to read, but depressing.


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